Thomas Pal Assignment Four Feedback

It has to be said it wasn’t what I thought I was going to get. This part of the course has been on my mind since first reading the course workbook. An essay!

I can’t recall the last time I have had to write an essay let alone thought about writing one. Although my tutor has praised me for making the initial step in writing a draft. I had absolutely no idea how to construct it in the first place. The areas I looked have probably steered me in the wrong direction, possibly the image I choose should of been one of the others I could have related to far better with my own personal and lived experience.

The tutor comments on how I haven’t developed a real point of focus for the argument or investigation. Looking back now I agree but envisaged this was just a draft and I would be told where I’ve gone wrong. Which I have really in the feedback, I just hadn’t thought it would have been like this. It proves that I need to look at how to construct an essay and not listen to my dad! (he thought it was pretty good and found it interesting, don’t listen to him again).

Strengths	Areas for development
You took the important step of starting and have written a decent draft	Contact  [learnersupport@oca.ac.uk] for guidance of formal academic writing
Your writing is generally clear	Once decided maintain your focus on your particular argument/ investigation/hypothesis
You demonstrate passionate investment in this work	Keep a good critical distance and don’t let the emotional impact of this ideological conflict impact too much

I have emailed the student help in regards to academic writing, funny how I look back to when I left secondary school to take the new journey into the military id never have to use anything educational in latter life. How wrong am I now?

Give me a set of patrol orders and a back brief with a patrol report, that is an easy task. This part has truly taken me outside and beyond my comfort zone. I now have time to look to review this assignment, wait to see what the student learning sends. Then attack this again.

At times I haven’t been great with criticism, however, this has hit home and if I’m being honest with myself do I have what it takes to continue with this course.