Thomas Pal Assignment five feedback

Tutor feedback received and I have to be honest I feel that this has probably been my best-received feedback where he has commented on that I stepped out of my comfort zone delivering a strong image with immediate graphic content. I feel that I have achieved something during this assignment. The idea of exploring this as a mini-series is something I have thought about but, only in thought.

Exploring a subject is something I’ve not done with any of the assignments though most have a similar concept to them. By changing my tactic and approaching self-portraits has now given me food for thought in where this assignment could progress to. Work in progress should have been able to explore a different side to this and I can see how the one idea was fixed in my sights and this is what I wanted it to be.

Below was mentioned.

The method of conjoining appears to be that you’ve shot each part separately and then ripped the images printed onto paper to assemble the final images. Importantly, the vertical paper tear runs directly through your face – maybe suggesting some type of rupture or fissure between the two versions of yourself.  I say this because the process of rough-and-ready ripping of paper could also be associated with a destructive handling of images. It’s not clear whether that vertical rip is a device linked to meaning, exploring how you feel personally/emotionally about the transformation from one life to another? The question is there for you to explore further.

This wasn’t something I had considered, more by chance that I want the tear to be through the face. Understandably this could represent something of a suggested narrative. For me, it was more frustration of not being able to control it as much as id wanted through the use of photoshop. Had the tear not separated the eyes and just been a top and bottom composition, then this I don’t believe would have had the impact I was looking for. The eyes have to say something in a portrait I believe the route to the sole as some people would say.

I had placed this on the student forum to see how my peers would receive it? Although only a couple commented on it, there wasn’t anything that was negative,  some even praised the elements of the image, I wasn’t expecting that.

Areas within the feedback open up for discussion where I agree with some elements. As to the propaganda and advertising part. I have to say yes to this. People have tried to portray this in the recent adverts of going from one person to another or a percentage need not apply to this organisation giving the viewer a different perspective of what they think is being recruited.

Where do I go now?

• Address areas of rework
• address the learning outcomes
• Attempt the mini-series
• prepare for assessment submission for November

Thomas Pal Assignment Four Feedback

It has to be said it wasn’t what I thought I was going to get. This part of the course has been on my mind since first reading the course workbook. An essay!

I can’t recall the last time I have had to write an essay let alone thought about writing one. Although my tutor has praised me for making the initial step in writing a draft. I had absolutely no idea how to construct it in the first place. The areas I looked have probably steered me in the wrong direction, possibly the image I choose should of been one of the others I could have related to far better with my own personal and lived experience.

The tutor comments on how I haven’t developed a real point of focus for the argument or investigation. Looking back now I agree but envisaged this was just a draft and I would be told where I’ve gone wrong. Which I have really in the feedback, I just hadn’t thought it would have been like this. It proves that I need to look at how to construct an essay and not listen to my dad! (he thought it was pretty good and found it interesting, don’t listen to him again).

I have emailed the student help in regards to academic writing, funny how I look back to when I left secondary school to take the new journey into the military id never have to use anything educational in latter life. How wrong am I now?

Give me a set of patrol orders and a back brief with a patrol report, that is an easy task. This part has truly taken me outside and beyond my comfort zone. I now have time to look to review this assignment, wait to see what the student learning sends. Then attack this again.

At times I haven’t been great with criticism, however, this has hit home and if I’m being honest with myself do I have what it takes to continue with this course.

Thomas Pal Assignment three feedback

Initial thoughts from this feedback, I think are fair and echo some of what I had originally planned out. My choice of black and white had been supported by the assignment. Areas, where I can enhance this assignment prior to submission for assessment, can be tidied up in the coming months.

• Introduction to my work
• tie in how I come to the idea
• tie in the research through trial and error
• produce the zine that was mentioned
• use of other media formats that went well
• ideas and research should be interwoven into the assignment write up
• don’t drift from the introduction write up into how I took the images

Overall I think this had been a strong assignment with how the images have come out. The way I have used my eyes to draw the viewer in has worked. I feel pleased with this outcome. Still some areas to tidy and consolidate in a little rework edit.