Thomas Pal Assignment Four Feedback
It has to be said it wasn’t what I thought I was going to get. This part of the course has been on my mind since first reading the course workbook. An essay!
I can’t recall the last time I have had to write an essay let alone thought about writing one. Although my tutor has praised me for making the initial step in writing a draft. I had absolutely no idea how to construct it in the first place. The areas I looked have probably steered me in the wrong direction, possibly the image I choose should of been one of the others I could have related to far better with my own personal and lived experience.
The tutor comments on how I haven’t developed a real point of focus for the argument or investigation. Looking back now I agree but envisaged this was just a draft and I would be told where I’ve gone wrong. Which I have really in the feedback, I just hadn’t thought it would have been like this. It proves that I need to look at how to construct an essay and not listen to my dad! (he thought it was pretty good and found it interesting, don’t listen to him again).
| Strengths | Areas for development |
| You took the important step of starting and have written a decent draft | Contact [learnersupport@oca.ac.uk] for guidance of formal academic writing |
| Your writing is generally clear | Once decided maintain your focus on your particular argument/ investigation/hypothesis |
| You demonstrate passionate investment in this work | Keep a good critical distance and don’t let the emotional impact of this ideological conflict impact too much |
I have emailed the student help in regards to academic writing, funny how I look back to when I left secondary school to take the new journey into the military id never have to use anything educational in latter life. How wrong am I now?
Give me a set of patrol orders and a back brief with a patrol report, that is an easy task. This part has truly taken me outside and beyond my comfort zone. I now have time to look to review this assignment, wait to see what the student learning sends. Then attack this again.
At times I haven’t been great with criticism, however, this has hit home and if I’m being honest with myself do I have what it takes to continue with this course.
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